How not to write a story.
Please read this story written by an SSB aspirant and
see the comments of the Psychologist to understand why it is wrong?
A young man standing near a river.
Rakesh was a young college boy of age 23.
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A
person who is 23 years old cannot be called a boy.
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He and his friends went to Shimla for
an outing. There while crossing a river he saw his friends already
reached far and they did not even noticed
him.
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Shimla
is a big fairly big town, with no river. . The hero gets LOST (Negative
approach)
Rather
than leading and taking initiative he became an observer and did not even
caution his friends while the distance increased. LACK OF SENSE OF
RESPONSIBILITY.
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He was lost in the mid evening. He managed
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The
language used by a graduate?? MID EVENING ??
Near a river why should be set a fire and how is wild animals
expected. Lack of Knowledge of
territory and highly imaginative story.
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to take some wooden pieces and put fire. So as wont’
allow any animals near to him as in morning he came to know the eastern direction
and he reached the road easily.
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He
should be knowing about the direction of the river, and also evening so that
he can see the sun set and judge the direction.
Does
students of today, do not carry a cell phone? It is a poorly written story and lacks Initiative
and logic.
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